Post Your Created Poems

[Palulukan_Taronyu]

Hey! Got a poem you created? Post it HERE!

Here's Mine.....


Hold the Line

Bright and early we are told. A town that we must hold.
Don't let anyone through he said. A man that now is dead.

The battle rages both sides suffer. But we are so much tougher.
Left and right tanks explode. Hold the line we are told.

We continue to slug it out. We are told to never pout.
For once again we are bold. We pushed forward through the cold.

Pushing the enemy back through the town. Now they are feeling really down.
Never again will they be so bold.

[_Omaticaya_]

Well hum... I don't write poems actually, but there's one special person that made me want to write something for her one day, so I did... I couldn't have written one single letter without such a Muse 'inspiring' me <3 Dedicated to her only...
Well here it is... Nothin' special...

"Because of You"

The Almighty God, created all things,
Agile fish, and eagles with wings,
Majestic felines, running fast along with the winds
And astounding nature, with all the beauties it brings

And He moulded humans, men, and women
Whose bond, shall forever, be unbroken
Since there's one more thing, yet to be spoken,
And it's the only thing, that let my soul awaken

Love...
The word above all others,
High as that eagle with its feathers
A feeling which never ceases, in all weathers...

But this neither, is even slightly close to You,
Flying straight into my heart, as only You can do,
From up there, Higher, than any creature ever flew...
And all this, is simply, Because of You.

---

[prowler]

my 2nd poem i ever did...


Your skin looks smooth
I just want to feel it against mine
Your lips
Looks just as fine
I want to kiss them
And never stop
What do you say...
Take my hand
And never stop?
Because i will never stop
Loving you...

[Palulukan_Taronyu]

Wow great poems guys!

What are you trying to do make me look bad?!...........:an-angry:

lol. :an-rotfl:

[_Omaticaya_]

^ LOL, thanks :) I love yours too Palu, and thanks for making the thread :nwink:

[Palulukan_Taronyu]

^ LOL, thanks :) I love yours too Palu, and thanks for making the thread :nwink:

Thanks. I am here to serve this great community.

[prowler]

Wow great poems guys!

What are you trying to do make me look bad?!...........:an-angry:

lol. :an-rotfl:

I think your poem was better then mine tbh.. would like to see moar :)

[Palulukan_Taronyu]

I think your poem was better then mine tbh.. would like to see moar :)

NON SENSE! Your poem is better then mine.

That was my first poem that I recall writing. I will see what I can come up with....

[NAvi_warrior64]

here's a poem from a while back,i had dive into the pile i have, i have a lot of poems, but this seems to fit my mood right now.

HEROES

Have you ever wanted to be a hero?
To be the one that stands up and says
"I could do that"?
To be engaged in an epic battle between good and evil?
To save the damsel in distress?
To have a goal and purse it with sheer determination?
To know right from wrong?
But there's a blurry line between good and evil
These are the questions you have to answer
But there is one you have to answer more than the rest,
Do you die as a hero or live long enough to see yourself become the villain?


here's a bonus poem

Adventure

Longing to be elsewhere
somewhere, out there
amongst the stars
to have an heroic journey
with a crew that you can call a family
on a starship called "destiny"....
from mars to the outer stars
sailing into the unknown
but as a captain you know for sure, you won't be alone


thank you, thank you, *bows*im here all week.

[_Omaticaya_]

I blogged this months ago, because I didn't know where to post it, and I didn't even know what it was, I just felt like writing something so... I did I guess.. But since there's an appropriate thread for Poetry now, if this stuff I wrote can even be considered a 'poem' :/ I'll post it here anyway. About Love again, only thing that kills me in pain, but also the only thing that keeps me alive...

"She"

Here I am looking for some kind of inspiration,
I'm trying hard but what I really need is motivation,
Then I lift my eyes up to the blue sky,
I wonder how it would be to be up there flying high.

But as I look down again, I realize it's me and a pen,
And all this that I'm writing is just the same script over again.
Love has become a game, and I know that sounds lame,
But I'm sure once in your life you've felt the same.

I wonder why I keep losing, It's getting so confusing
She's the prize in my eyes, but losing Her is no surprise,
And as I'm thinking of my life with Her forever,
I realize She's flown away just like a feather.

How many times is it gonna happen,
I wish She could forget the rest and fly with me to heaven,
But as i'm feeling down, with my knees upon the ground,
I see Her again, and everything is just sound.

-

That was it... Wack init? ^_^

[_Omaticaya_]

I wrote this today... Same Muse...<3 same 'type' as my other two, just a bit longer ^_^... :nsmile: Hope it isn't too trash... I can't think of a title :( Go easy people I'm just a stupid 'Ranter', not a Poet... :nsmile:

-

The everlasting Quest for Love, that Special Devotion...
Nothing can compare to that Glare Love gives, that one, Beautiful Emotion.

Then comes a time, a time when every little word has been Said
When my Soul has Bled, and even my Tears I have Shed
The day a sheet of paper, and some words, felt almost Dead...

That moment, I realized that only a Sweet Melody could Explain
That feeling Sovereign, the tangle of Pleasure and deep Pain
An endless Storm of thoughts pouring out my brain, just as the falling rain...

When only a Special Song, seems to Bind
All the Passion I have inside, Trapped in my Mind
Releasing my Love, which sadly, feels so Blind...

What could ever compare to a look in Your Angelic eyes, my Utmost Dream
To be Enchanted, and Dazzled, by that Ravishing Beam...
Well, I guess I found my idea of Supreme.

Making my choice, and forever rejoice, wishing to be your Defender
And never give up, until death only, could make me Surrender
And Never leave You, an entity so Delightful, Stunning, and Tender.

Dreaming to Run fast along the Winds in a vast field, with only Love as our Shield
And lie Together, so close, under the shiny Stars along the Seashore,
I Honestly couldn't ask for More...

That's my quest... Just that one Feeling,
To be with you, Feel you gently Breathing
And Never, ever, see You Leaving

-

For you MignoNNNNNNNNNNN ;)

[prowler]

^
very nice poem ma tsmukan, i like it :)

[_Omaticaya_]

^Aww... Thankyou matey :nsmile: I see you

[Ney]

OMG I can't believe it! :an-shock: :an-shock: Man, you wrote this ? You're serious? And then you tell me you're not a poet???? PFFFFF!!! You're incredibly...wait...EXTRAORDINARILY talented! And that muse, she isn't worthy of such a creative, gifted soul.

[Ney]

Well hum... I don't write poems actually, but there's one special person that made me want to write something for her one day, so I did... I couldn't have written one single letter without such a Muse 'inspiring' me <3 Dedicated to her only...
Well here it is... Nothin' special...

"Because of You"

The Almighty God, created all things,
Agile fish, and eagles with wings,
Majestic felines, running fast along with the winds
And astounding nature, with all the beauties it brings

And He moulded humans, men, and women
Whose bond, shall forever, be unbroken
Since there's one more thing, yet to be spoken,
And it's the only thing, that let my soul awaken

Love...
The word above all others,
High as that eagle with its feathers
A feeling which never ceases, in all weathers...

But this neither, is even slightly close to You,
Flying straight into my heart, as only You can do,
From up there, Higher, than any creature ever flew...
And all this, is simply, Because of You.

---

*GAAAASP* HOW COME I'VE NEVER SEEN THIS ONE HERE? it's a shame that I'm quoting it almost a month later >:C

[_Omaticaya_]

OMG I can't believe it! :an-shock: :an-shock: Man, you wrote this ? You're serious? And then you tell me you're not a poet???? PFFFFF!!! You're incredibly...wait...EXTRAORDINARILY talented! And that muse, she isn't worthy of such a creative, gifted soul.

You're too sweet :):) I'm definitely Not extraordinary :nwink: She is Ma Tsmukè, She is, she's worthy of the best there is, what I can't give... Because my lame wannabe rhymes can't even compare to what such an Angel deserves :nlove: You know it <333333333333333333333

[prowler]

Here's a poem i been thinking to write for some time now... Never really got around it until now..



Every Night

Every night i think about you
Every night i want to be with you
Every night i want to dream about you

Every night i wish i could leave earth...
And wake up on Pandora...
Next to you...

Every night i will keep trying...
Because its the only thing...
That keeps me going...

I could never hurt you...
I could never lie to you...

I just wish i could be with you...

[_Omaticaya_]

Lovely poem prowler, I love this kind of poems <3<3<3<3<3 I see you tsmukan :nsmile: Thanks for sharing <3

[CalumDC]

I'm not exactly too poetic but thought I'd make a contribution - from my DA repository of such things - it's a little forced in places but fairly average of the rest of them I've cobbled together.

My Forest

A tangled web of greenery
Fading slowly into red
See the falling scenery
Leaves plummeting, dead
Lie crushed on the ground
Memories of a better day
When hope could be found
Now consumed by my decay

I walk between the trees
Sadness staining the air
Whispers hang in the breeze
Soft words of cold despair
Serenading an unwary ear
This cold sorrow stings
Feelings won't disappear
And the misery it brings

Further in the wood I go
The trees grow more dense
A world draped in shadow
Clouding out every sense
I'm numbed by the pain
Every soft spoken blade
Cutting through me again
All my scars have stayed

My route remains haunted
Stalked by the illusions
Of all I've ever wanted
Only pathetic delusions
It's my dreams you steal
Sleep silenced by beauty
No hope of becoming real
For only in there I see

I find my secluded seat
Hidden far out of view
By a veil of thin defeat
My forlorn dreams of you
Twisted lies in my head
They're tearing me apart
But onward I dare tread
With this wounded heart

The bushes echo your name
Painting your perfect face
I'll always feel the same
Here in this empty place
Sounds piercing the sky
The birds circling above
Trying hard not to cry
Mourning pointless love

Clouds are closing in
And blocking out my sun
Any hope dying within
As my descent has begun
I've fallen into you
Caught now in this trap
I don't know what to do
Waiting for the snap

This place is my peace
A constant in the dark
My sanctum of release
A lonely palace of bark
The cold cobbled stone
Pools of dappled light
I'm here lost and alone
And it won't be alright

[prowler]

^
nice i like it :)

[_Omaticaya_]

I'm not exactly too poetic but thought I'd make a contribution - from my DA repository of such things - it's a little forced in places but fairly average of the rest of them I've cobbled together.

My Forest

A tangled web of greenery
Fading slowly into red
See the falling scenery
Leaves plummeting, dead
Lie crushed on the ground
Memories of a better day
When hope could be found
Now consumed by my decay

I walk between the trees
Sadness staining the air
Whispers hang in the breeze
Soft words of cold despair
Serenading an unwary ear
This cold sorrow stings
Feelings won't disappear
And the misery it brings

Further in the wood I go
The trees grow more dense
A world draped in shadow
Clouding out every sense
I'm numbed by the pain
Every soft spoken blade
Cutting through me again
All my scars have stayed

My route remains haunted
Stalked by the illusions
Of all I've ever wanted
Only pathetic delusions
It's my dreams you steal
Sleep silenced by beauty
No hope of becoming real
For only in there I see

I find my secluded seat
Hidden far out of view
By a veil of thin defeat
My forlorn dreams of you
Twisted lies in my head
They're tearing me apart
But onward I dare tread
With this wounded heart

The bushes echo your name
Painting your perfect face
I'll always feel the same
Here in this empty place
Sounds piercing the sky
The birds circling above
Trying hard not to cry
Mourning pointless love

Clouds are closing in
And blocking out my sun
Any hope dying within
As my descent has begun
I've fallen into you
Caught now in this trap
I don't know what to do
Waiting for the snap

This place is my peace
A constant in the dark
My sanctum of release
A lonely palace of bark
The cold cobbled stone
Pools of dappled light
I'm here lost and alone
And it won't be alright

... :O I Cannot emphasize enough, just how much I Love this...
Thankyou so much for sharing this wonderful poem, I think it's fantastic, and you're gifted... I see you Calum :nsmile:
Now you got me in the mood of writing a poem again :P I wish I had some time to write a new one... But in reality, it's usually about being insipred in my case... And unfortunately in this period I'm just a totally sad and depressed dude.. Love strikes back... but reading this was really great, such a gorgeous poem full of feelings :) I hope maybe these Christmas holidays I'll sit and write something...

[CalumDC]

Thank you all - I really appreciate the great response, my writing efforts are just a form of overflow from the mind to vent the less joyous thoughts that occur in there. I might post some more of the repertoire albeit they don't really get any happier.

[_Omaticaya_]

Thank you all - I really appreciate the great response, my writing efforts are just a form of overflow from the mind to vent the less joyous thoughts that occur in there. I might post some more of the repertoire albeit they don't really get any happier.
I agree ma tsmukan... Same here... It's a way to pour your soul out through some rhymes and imagination... Take care man

[Blue Abyssinian]

What a nice thread! I've been writing poems often, mostly - and how could it be any different - in times of despair. Just to get rid of feelings which would have eaten me up otherwise. I won't post them here, as they are in other languages than English, so that wouldn't make sense, would it. But, I might just feel inspired to write a poem in English one day. I'll post it here, then. I doubt it would be anywhere near what you guys wrote, though. Man, you all are so good.

[CalumDC]

Thought it had been a while since I contributed to this thread and found something else in the little store of things I have hidden away in a darkened corner of the internet. I know it isn't set as such within the natural world, instead a cafe in a community centre, not really glamorous or exciting but here goes. Although it does go on for a fair while - I ramble a lot.

The Fear

A sound echoes in the air
Meandering over the space
Everyone remains unaware
It carves fear on my face
Ominously etching the lines
Creases forming in my skin
Revealing the clear signs
As the fear is sinking in

Those words struck my ear
With a searing bolt of pain
Wishing they could disappear
As they burrowed in my brain
My mind wrestled with sense
To understand what was heard
And plan the best defence
The fear remains undeterred

It winds though like a snake
Constricting my beaten heart
The icy scales keep me awake
Before tearing my mind apart
The venom begins to paralyse
Freezes the blood in my veins
Before you can even recognise
The fear has taken the reins

Stare gently across the table
Work out where it came from
Its threat I need to disable
But fear's victim I've become
Other faces remain unchanged
All immune to what was spoken
Only I was mentally rearranged
The fear in me has now awoken

That sentence left them alone
As the conversation goes on
I bear the weight on my own
Even when the words are gone
How can they all be so blind?
The threat is so plain to see
It's running wild in my mind
The fear has only chosen me

The moment has come and passed
Yet the fear grips my chest
It's frozen claws holding fast
The poison won't be suppressed
Slowly retreating from the hall
Haunting words making me ill
Giving in to it, ready to fall
The fear sweeps in for the kill

I know what the words did say
As they slice through my soul
Covering my world in cold grey
Stretching my weak self-control
Shredding my mind from within
Trying so hard here to conceal
The shaking mess under my skin
But the fear shows what I feel

[Blue Abyssinian]

How can they all be so blind?
The threat is so plain to see
It's running wild in my mind
The fear has only chosen me




Your words crawl right under my skin. I've been there. Any your lines express exactly what I felt then. IRAYO. Keep writing & posting. You are an inspiration to many of us.

:tranquillity:

[Blue Abyssinian]

Here's a kind of poem a wrote some years ago. It doesn't rhyme, really. I realize it's quite a melodramatic one, but it was easiest to translate to English from the language I'd originally written it in. I'll try to come up with something sunnier in the future. Promised!



- slow death -

my hand
pushed away
-
my strength
broken
-
my smile
erased
-
my hope
drowned
-
my longing
frozen
-
my heart
lacerated
-
my soul
trodden
-
my love
smothered
-
you should have killed me
right away

[_Omaticaya_]

^Gosh, that was so lovely... I really know what you mean, I See You... And I thought those same things so many times...


you should have killed me
right away

[Blue Abyssinian]

Pain felt the same way exactly, at totally different times & places, equally put into words. Yeah. Maybe that's a part of what Seeing means.

[Blue Abyssinian]

Written some years ago...


Leaving

Could cry for
But I'm laughing
Could shut up
But I talk
Could sleep tight
But I'm waking
Could pull up
But I walk

Could shout out
But I'm whis'pring
Could blind me
But I see
Could hate you
But I'm loving
Could stay here -
But I'll flee...

[Blue Abyssinian]

balancing
on that thin line
between my heart and mind
I wonder when
I will be falling
for you




Written some time ago, too...

[_Omaticaya_]

^Wonderful <3 Thankyou for sharing dear Blue :)

My Heart always seems to Outweigh my mind on that thin line, and I Fall everytime... Luckily, Falling into that Love is the most Tender and Soft landing I could ever Wish for <3

[Blue Abyssinian]

I'm just realizing, I should have put the purple one first, and then the blue poem, chronologically, it makes more sense. :o)
Glad you like it :o))). That line. Yeah. Sometimes, I have a strong mind. I need to. When it's impossible...*sigh*
Night, ma colorful eylan. I'm very tired.

[_Omaticaya_]

Nothing Special as Usual, I'm No Good at This ^_^ All That is Special and Matters in My personal opinion, is The Person that Makes You Want to Write For Her, :an-smile:


Love, Had Become a Deceitful Creed...
A Haunting Fiddle, a Cruel Riddle...
Kept Me Trapped Mending My Broken Heart, an Endless Puzzle...
Yet... It Lingers On, To Be My Greatest Need...

With Your Gentle Words, My Soul I Feed,
They Shine On Clear and Bright, as Sunlight,
Illuminating My Lonely Dark and Interior Night...
And the Obscure Path Gains Brand New Light, By Your Lead...

All Had Become Shallow and Grey, In a Puddle Of Tears I'd Fall and Pray...
I'd Have just Leapt and Vanished, From a Height...
And Caused You, a Selfish, Unfair Fright...
But... You Rescued Me... a Luminous Guardian, May I Say...?

Turned The Sorrow Back to Cheerful Play,
Swept the Bad Torments Away,
Molded me Tenderly, as Next to You I Lay... Pliable as Clay...
Eternal Gratitude and Love, Is All I Can Bring Forth to You, EveryDay...

[prowler]

^
nice, i like it :) i would click the like button but im on my phone..

[_Omaticaya_]

^Thankyou prowler, Kind as always =)

[Palulukan_Taronyu]

Not bad Blue not bad at all.....

:)

[Blue Abyssinian]

Quote slightly adapted:

Very Special as Usual, You are Incredibly Good at This ^_^ All That is Special and Matters in My personal opinion, is The Person that writes such beautiful poetry :an-smile:


:rose::butterfly::rose:

[Blue Abyssinian]

Sometimes, you sit down, you're thinking with the pen in your hand, and nothing happens. No inspiration, no words. And then, other times, you don't even sit and a sudden thought hits you, and you feel someone so close. And the words, born in the heart, flow out and naturally melt together...


your heart

so many names, yet just one heart
which beats a steady sound
and speaks the language of your soul
since ever love it found

so tenderly it puts in words
what soul and mind behold
and builds a bridge to floods of blue
to melt in dreams of gold

and carefully it lights a flame
and plants a seed of love
and paints a silver ray of light
descending from above

it lights my path, it warms my soul
it makes me bliss and calm
its love is sweetly calling mine
i'll put it in your palm


May 10th, 2012

[_Omaticaya_]

Sometimes, you sit down, you're thinking with the pen in your hand, and nothing happens. No inspiration, no words. And then, other times, you don't even sit and a sudden thought hits you, and you feel someone so close. And the words, born in the heart, flow out and naturally melt together...


your heart

so many names, yet just one heart
which beats a steady sound
and speaks the language of your soul
since ever love it found

so tenderly it puts in words
what soul and mind behold
and builds a bridge to floods of blue
to melt in dreams of gold

and carefully it lights a flame
and plants a seed of love
and paints a silver ray of light
descending from above

it lights my path, it warms my soul
it makes me bliss and calm
its love is sweetly calling mine
i'll put it in your palm


May 10th, 2012


<3 Stupenda

[_Omaticaya_]

A wannabe Poem I wrote in Italian to conclude an essay I had to write... About Nature, the only Topic next to Love that makes me want to write...
About the Cycle of Seasons symbolizing the Cycle of Feelings, from Loss of Hope as the Autumn leaves fall, to the dead Winter covered in snow, to the Birth of new Hope in the lively Spring and the Heat of the summer Sunshine...




“La Stagione del Sentimento”

Immerso fra le sfumature d’un manto di foglie Brune,
All’oscuro della sua origine, fruisco di una soave Complicità,
Fonte di una libertà che dai cupi tormenti sembra Immune,
Benché conscio, dell’unanime e fatale Caducità…

La quale, si rivela nella più quieta natura Spoglia,
Coperta d’una coltre nevosa, densa e Candida,
Al punto che Nulla più, pare patir alcuna Doglia
Fuorché, la mia ineluttabile espressione Pallida…

Ma come la natura risorge vivida e Rigogliosa,
Con farfalle e fiori in un dipinto di incantevoli Colori
E di freschi frutti e fiorenti essenze Prosperosa,
Avvinto in quel paesaggio così vitale, Imbosco i miei Dolori…

Svaniranno poi, dissolti nella torrida Arsura
Accecati dal Sole e dal suo impetuoso Bagliore
Che nella luce e nella pace, qualsiasi angoscia Oscura
E giunto al tenue tramonto, una nuova speranza è Matura...
-
La morte, è d’ogni Essere Consorte,
Ma nei Meandri della Natura, una Genuina Sortita, può Arricchire la Vita.

[prowler]

I didn't understand a word.. But it sounded nice :) Translation maybe? :)

[_Omaticaya_]

I didn't understand a word.. But it sounded nice :) Translation maybe? :)

Okay :) Thankyou :) I Promise, when I finish my exams and have time, I will try. But I'm one of those that believes Poetry is "untranslatable" :ntongue: Well, it is ofcourse, I've read loads, and It's normal and common, but there's no way to get all the sounds and rhymes and meanings the same, not quite... I have also never tried before with my own writings, but You gave me a new idea/challenge :ntongue: I'll look forward to giving it a shot ^_^

By the way, at least, :nlol: The Title means, 'The Season of Sentiment' ^_^

[prowler]

I'm glad i gave you a new idea/challenge and i'm looking forward to it :) and also, good luck with your exams :nsmile:

[_Omaticaya_]

Irayo Very Much dear prowler :nsmile:

[_Omaticaya_]

Another Scribble I wrote, Inspired by Love, and by Someone again, Somehow...



"Blue"





Fervid Flames Ignite the Obscure,
Haunting Quests Pursue and Endure,
Heading for The Woods… Through the Silent Moor,
Still…Within Me Withstands Something Frail, But Pure.

Generating Sensuous, Unknown Sensation
Rendering Profound, Interior Vibration
Leading Me Somehow, To Tenacious Devotion
Craving For the Mystic Root of that Creation…

Finally! Awoken by a Comforting Dawn
Somehow Trembling… Something, Feels Reborn...
Oblivious, I Look Up Into the Blue Above,
Anonymous You Are No Longer, My Love.

Flowing By the Melodies of a Magical Flute…
Embracing The Notes of a Ravishing Harp…
I Follow the Pace of Your Luminous Route...
With Novel Peace in my Face… Love. Blissfully Sharp.

[Porthos1]

Very nice, Omaticaya! Almost missed the title because of the color. I wish I had that talent.

PS: I couldn't wait for your exams so I pulled out my dusty Italian Dictionary (If I butchered it, please feel free to make some changes):

The Season of Sentiment - Omaticaya

Nestled between the shades of a mantle of leaves brown,
Unaware of its origin, enjoying a soave complicity,
A source of freedom and the gloomy torment seems to be immune.
Although aware, unanimous and fatal Transience…

Which, is revealed in more quiet nature Bare,
Covered in a thaw, dense and Candida,
To the point that nothing more, it seems he thwarts any Travail
Except, my inevitable expression Pale…

But as the nature rises again vivid and lush,
With butterflies and flowers in a painting by enchanting Colors
AND fresh fruits and flourishing essences Prosperous,
Testifieth unto me at that landscape so vital, Hide my sorrows ...

Then vanish, dissolved in torrid Drought
Blinded by the sun and by his fierce Glare
That in the light and peace, any anguish Dark
AND reached the soft sunset, a new hope and mature ...
-
The death, be his Consort,
But the intricacies of nature, a genuine Voyage, can enrich your life.




Butchered or not, this is flippen good! Win!:good: :applause:

[_Omaticaya_]

:O...

wow. I Can't believe you just did that Porthos1... I mean, don't know what to say honestly, Thankyou, Irayo and, well, I'm Happy you liked It. It was the first "serious" Poem I wrote in italian, as I prefer English, but anyway, I put everything I had into it only to try hopelessly to impress the commission that will examinate my forsaken essay, which is italian obviously... -_-

Well, I promise You, as I said, as soon as I can, which means Thursday *lol* I will come here and Translate it all again for You so you can also understand all the meaning, as you seemed to like it and took the Outstanding effort of translating my scribbling :), I owe you it mate :an-smile:
In any case You did a good job man considering what you used, :) Just many expressions are 'untranslatable' I guess, some are also ancient italian, and most of it is written in a poetic form meaning, not the regular way words would go if you we're speaking, but it's all things I learned and loved and appreciated in the only thing I Enjoyed studying in my student life (which is Over finally), Poetry, Italian especially.

Same goes for any language in my opinion. For instance all the importance I give to trying to create harmony of sounds and words will be Impossible to remake in english, but anyway, I'll see what I can do...

Cheers Porthos1 :)

[Porthos1]

Thanks buddy. Not knowing the language, it was hard to understand where you were going in the sentences sometimes. The basic translation threw the flow way off and I had to make a judgement call on some of the wording to get back to theme. I figured there was some words that the little book wasn't showing so I assumed they were either old or slang of some sort. It was actually pretty fun. Sorry, I couldn't wait to see what you had done. I liked the last sentence; are the last two lines close?

PS I am not doing that again unless the poem is shorter! Ha ha

[_Omaticaya_]

Thanks buddy. Not knowing the language, it was hard to understand where you were going in the sentences sometimes. The basic translation threw the flow way off and I had to make a judgement call on some of the wording to get back to theme. I figured there was some words that the little book wasn't showing so I assumed they were either old or slang of some sort. It was actually pretty fun. Sorry, I couldn't wait to see what you had done. I liked the last sentence; are the last two lines close?

PS I am not doing that again unless the poem is shorter! Ha ha

You're Welcome Bud :nwink:
Yeah I bet it was hard, that's normal, I mean, especially when it comes to Poetry for sure, that's what I'm saying, I was surprised you even tried, it was so Cool of you mate :)
Yes I guess most you couldn't find or figure we're Old or not so common words, and also all the rethorical devices mess the translation up and make it harder :nsmile:
Yes some kind of ending, sometimes I think It's nice to leave that sort of misty ending with no further words, leaves you in the indefinite, desiring to understand deeper alone, but in this case I just added a couple of lines, it kind of links to the topic of the essay, as it is about Nature.
I wasn't sure when I wrote it if to keep those two lines or not, as especially the last line gave me the hardest of times *lol* when I translate it you'll see what it meant, simpler than you think, I just had to make the sound be right, I'm a bit meticolous sometimes :nlol:

Sure lol! That's ok matey :nwink: I See You ^_^

[Blue Abyssinian]

Inspired by Tsahaylu


Magic Bond


I speak out words
you started thinking
*
I tell a story
which you dreamt
*
I come to you
before you call me
*
I take a journey
which you planned

~*~

You cut your hand
and I am bleeding
*
You have a nightmare
I wake up
*
You think of love
and I am smiling
*
You are in doubt
and I get stuck

~*~

We feel each other
when we’re blissful
*
We feel each other
when in pain
*
We hold each other
from a distance
*

Invisibly, forever, chained


~*~

Blue, July 2012

[Blue Abyssinian]

Inspired by Pain


At night

At night is when the ghosts come out
At night is when I bleed
At night is when I miss you most
At night it’s you I need…

When darkness crawls in every cell
And ice fills every vein
When heartache tears the soul apart
That’s when I feel insane…

That’s when I scream and sob and sigh
That’s when I cut my skin
And when I pray to God above
To stop the pain within…

At night is when I stopped to sleep
At night is when I cry
At night is when my heartbreak hurts
And every night – I die…

~*~

Blue, July 2012


Happy summer to all of you! :o)

[Porthos1]

^Like, but hope your days are much better! ha ha

[Blue Abyssinian]

^Like, but hope your days are much better! ha ha

*lol* Days are always better - loud, crowded, busy. Somehow we always manage. The thing is: Mr. Day swallows all crap, and then Mrs. Night vomits it all over you again. ;o)

[_Omaticaya_]

Very nice, Omaticaya! Almost missed the title because of the color. I wish I had that talent.

PS: I couldn't wait for your exams so I pulled out my dusty Italian Dictionary (If I butchered it, please feel free to make some changes):

The Season of Sentiment - Omaticaya

Nestled between the shades of a mantle of leaves brown,
Unaware of its origin, enjoying a soave complicity,
A source of freedom and the gloomy torment seems to be immune.
Although aware, unanimous and fatal Transience…

Which, is revealed in more quiet nature Bare,
Covered in a thaw, dense and Candida,
To the point that nothing more, it seems he thwarts any Travail
Except, my inevitable expression Pale…

But as the nature rises again vivid and lush,
With butterflies and flowers in a painting by enchanting Colors
AND fresh fruits and flourishing essences Prosperous,
Testifieth unto me at that landscape so vital, Hide my sorrows ...

Then vanish, dissolved in torrid Drought
Blinded by the sun and by his fierce Glare
That in the light and peace, any anguish Dark
AND reached the soft sunset, a new hope and mature ...
-
The death, be his Consort,
But the intricacies of nature, a genuine Voyage, can enrich your life.




Butchered or not, this is flippen good! Win!:good: :applause:

Hey Bro... I'm really sorry I kept this waiting so long... I have to say Sorry to You and prowler too for keeping you waiting and admitting I decided not to translate it, atleast for now...

Honestly the last period, (yeah, I can have brief intense periods apparently *lol*) I just, really don't feel like 'poetry' anymore.
The last two I put Effort in we're this Italian one, which was much appreciated at my final exam 3 weeks ago and that made me happy, and then the one entitled 'Blue', my favourite personally. Other than that, I doubt I'll write anything else for a while... I'm no good anyway and I don't even know why I do... U.u

So yeah, I'm sorry, and I said, I would not be able to make the translation sound anything like the original :/
So I'll Just Praise you again Porthos1 for doing an excellent charming job, and giving it some Life anyway.

It is very well translated, except for misunderstandings here and there which are normal, due to the intricacy of the words... And the language differences...

Anyhow, I'll leave it to this.

[Porthos1]

@Omaticaya: "I'm no good anyway and I don't even know why I do... U.u"

Bull! You have talent and if my translation was even a little close, that was pretty good! Still a win in my book.

[_Omaticaya_]

Just a Random thought I made up...

Past Equals to Present,
Until You Manage to Stop Letting it Influence You.
Only Then, You Will Understand Why, Today is called "Present",
As it is a Precious Gift to be Unwrapped,
But Only Once You've Managed to Unwrap Yourself from the Haunting Past First...

[prowler]

^
I like it :)

[_Omaticaya_]

^
I like it :)

Irayo ma'Eylan :an-smile:

[Blue Abyssinian]

discovery


love is blind
they say
yet not until she lent her eyes to me
I fathomed
what it means
to see


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August 2012

[Sennah]

First poem ever, be gentle... :) The first part is a bit dark and the second part is more "happy". Darkness and light I guess.




I have a name but no one knows my face
I have a voice but no one hears by breath
I am a phantom, a silent scream
I am a faceless outcast dwelling in the cold dream


But I dream of a world brighter than a thousand stars
A world with no hate, a world where joy blossoms
Where people are the light in the darkness
Hope never truly dies, love keeps it alive

[prowler]

Very nice, i like it :)

[allrock123]

Thank you for sharing, expressing feelings on our core dreams held inside is very important, when people share there dreams changes happen.